Blog Post #40- Edits to Script

 Before I start filming, I want to make sure that all my lines are good for my film so I decided to look back in to my script and make some slight revisions for the purpose of perfecting my film.

Within the first page of my script I added a scene of the boys going to the kitchen rather than Alex already having the drinks, which is shown by the dialogue that states "soo, where are they?" and "They're over here." This is to make the boys getting the drinks seem more realistic. I also added lines about putting on music because a party without music wouldn't make sense.

In the second page a few lines were added, changed and removed. An example would be the new line that states "yeah it was a banger, and I know bangers". This was used for the purpose of making the dialogue more comedic to the audience. On this page the dialogue with the neighbor is very similar but it is heavily tweaked on the third page.

On the third page, the conversation with the neighbor was almost completely changed because I felt as if the dialogue with the neighbor being short would not be meaningful so I decided to extend the conversation. This is shown by the neighbor initially being annoyed to being more understanding while Alex agrees with the neighbor and listens to his requests. In my initial script, the neighbor was only annoyed and there was a lack of much dialogue so I decided to make the revisions show more emotions coming from the characters. After the conversation, I changed the dialogue in my script to show that Alex listened to the neighbor instead of in the initial script where Alex just simply states how the neighbor was mad at the music.

On the fourth page, I changed the dialogue slightly to show Alex interacting separately with both of his friends instead of saying a good bye to both of them at once. I also removed the line that Jake says about the time because I got an idea to use a transition that informs the audience that time has passed which would make the initial line that Jake states not work because the initial line was stated after the conversation with the neighbor rather than after the passage of time in the film.

These edits to my script will ensure that the dialogue is appealing to the audience and makes sense based on the context of the scene.